雅思写作素材:犯罪类话题写作思路
时间:2021-09-24
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2018年3月3日考题
In most countries, prisons are the most common solution for the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with better education so that they do not become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
首先,prison 和 better education 都是有效的;其次,再问问你的心,到底哪个更有效?多数人会觉得是 better education 吧。
参考思路
长远看来,better education 更有效;
但是针对一些 better education 无法改善的人,仍然需要 prison.
即prison 是 better education 的补充
主体段的展开:
1. 为什么 better education 更有效
2. better education 无法改善的人是谁
开头段
【Opinions differ on the extent to which incarceration deals effectively with crime as opposed to improving the quality of education.】 My view is that there will always be a role for prisons in confining evil people, but better education is more likely to reduce crime levels.
必须有【……】部分的信息,才算回答问题。
主体段1:讨论 prison 的作用
黑体部分为主题句,告诉读者这一段你要写什么。
1) 犯了谋杀罪等重罪的大量囚犯,靠防止犯罪的教育来改变他们,已经太迟了。保护人们不受他们的伤害,比释放他们并指望通过教育来改造他们,更重要。
2) 有些人无论接受了多少教育,都会选择犯罪。很多白领犯罪,比如诈骗,就是需要高智商的人才能设计出来的。
Nevertheless, improvements to education would, in my view, be a better means of reducing the number of people who want to commit crime in the long-term. Acquiring more useful knowledge especially when young would provide greater opportunities for entry into satisfying careers. Further education opens up new possibilities in terms of developing healthy interests and participating in worthwhile activities such as sports and hobbies. Better education would achieve improved outcomes such as a proficiency in a sport rather than just a passing interest. The more people achieve personal goals in terms of their careers or hobbies, the more people will find meaning in life and thus not be tempted to use their talents in illegal ways.
1) 获取更多有用的知识,尤其在年轻的时候,会给人带去更大的机会,进入体面的职业。
2) 中学后的深造,为人们培养健康的兴趣和参加有意义的活动,提供了新的可能性。
3) 更好的教育能带来更好的结果,比如对某项运动转瞬即逝的兴趣变成了熟练。
越多的人在职业和爱好方面达到了目标,就有越多的人找到生命的意义,因此不会被诱惑将自己的才华运用到违法的事情上。
结尾段
In conclusion, I acknowledge the place that imprisonment will have in protecting society from serious offenders who have already committed crimes. 【However crime levels are more likely to fall more drastically over the longer term by reason of improvement to education.】
【……】部分,再次给出观点,这才叫做观点。
